I'm back with another Thursday Taster, a taster of hopefully what will become my first f/f story. Comments will be especially appreciated as f/f is something I have only dabbled with and I want to make sure I don't fuck it up.
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Remembering
Katie
As the first rays of
sun caressed Summer's body she stretched, and began to slowly wake.
Opening her eyes she turned her head, and stared at the empty space
next to her. Reaching across Summer smoothed her hand over the cold
sheet, before turning her head away and stared at the window.
Summer hated waking
up alone yet refused to allow anyone to sleep next to her, and had
ever since the only person she had ever really loved, Katie, had left
for the city. The two of them were supposed be going together but
never having gone further than the small town, a few miles from the
village where she lived, Summer had got cold feet at the last minute.
Now every morning when she woke she would stare at the empty space,
think of Katie and dream of what could have been.
Together the two of
them had been the perfect couple, hardly ever apart and even the
narrow minded villagers who, at first, shunned the pair of them as
they walked around like any other couple grew to admire them, as they
refused to buckle to the pressure of their parents to find nice boys
and settle down, as they put it.
Summer closed her
eyes, pictured Katie next to her and felt a warmth coursing through
her body, a warmth which sent tingles of electricity to her nipples,
hardening them instantly, before continuing down through her stomach
and coming to a stop between her legs.
Slipping her hand in
to the top of her white, cotton, panties Summer stretched to her full
length and began to rub her swollen lips. Moaning Katie's name as she
flicked her erect clitoris the feelings only Katie had ever caused
her to feel surged through her body and, as her orgasm began to take
hold, a lone tear fell from her eyes. It was then Summer finally
realized that to be happy she had to bite the bullet, and head for
the city.
©JSMorbius
10 comments:
Excellent sensuous descriptions. I hope Summer meets up again with Katie soon
Sensuous, tactile descriptions. "Bite the bullet" is a phrase most women would not use, unless they were talking about a man. It takes women longer to reach orgasm, so a bit more build-up to build the momentum would be good, but other wise, I enjoyed the longing, the loss, the feeling of having missed her queue. The acceptance of the villagers was really nice, to encourage their nesting then then the conflict of Katie's departure. Lots and lots of potential here, Jules. Loved it. xo
Reads like a flash fiction. I like the sensory details like the cold sheets- that was a great touch.
It did feel a bit rushed toward the end.
I also liked her thought process, I connected with her internally and hope she finds Katie.
Hot little number that peeks the readers interest immediately. Nicely done!!!
Wow! I love how you describe her movements and her thoughts. I can so feel how much she misses Katie.
Great taster.
Summer's lonliness and yearnings for Katie are well described and poignant. I can only hope she meets and connects with her. Nice intro to her search and adventures in the city.
This was both sensuous and scorching. I like what you painted there in the story. Good luck on the f/f story. Dude, you're hitting it on the nail!
I agree with her conclusion. She definitely to get going.
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